- revised, taking out stuff I didn't like, forging necessary new transitions.
- admired it.
- took a shower.
- while in the shower, thought, "I hate that couplet structure."
- got dressed, while keeping the above in mind.
- abolished the couplet structure, taking more stuff out, forging more necessary new transitions.
- printed it out.
- took it to my writing group.
When it was my turn to read the poem aloud, I saw several more things I wanted to change. But overall, with a few more revisions and judicious excisings, I think the poem is in dang good shape.
I like the way writing the poem over the course of a month allowed for new ideas to develop. There was a certain amount of circling back and reiteration, but there were new figures and new ideas that worked themselves out. At one point, I made a note to myself: "this isn't about x, it is about y"--a correction in course that gave the poem a through-line--but mostly, I would look at the previous couplet or two, pick up the thread, and try something new.
Today when I got up, I thought, ugh, I don't have a poem. But then I thought, WAIT. I have thirty-one couplets! And that, the people, that was a very good thought.